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¿¹) Most students like eating junk food a lot. (½ÃÀÛ¹®Àå) However, my teacher told me that junk food is not good for health. Thus, I think schools should not sell junk food anymore. (ÁÖÁ¦¹®Àå)
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¿¹) Junk food contains ingredients that are not good for health and can make students feel sluggish and heavy. (³í°Å¹®Àå1) Since junk food tastes good, students will not want to eat healthy food anymore. (³í°Å¹®Àå2)
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°á·ÐÀº º»·ÐÀÇ ³»¿ëÀ» ¿ä¾àÇϰųª ÀÚ½ÅÀÇ »ý°¢À» ¸íÈ®Çϰí Àڽۨ ÀÖ°Ô ´Ù½Ã ÇÑ ¹ø Á¤¸®ÇÏ´Â °ÍÀÌ Áß¿äÇÏ´Ù. ±Û¾´ÀÌÀÇ ÁÖÀåÀ» ´Ù½Ã ÇÑ ¹ø ¾ð±ÞÇØ¼ °Á¶ÇÏ´Â ºÎºÐÀÌ´Ù. À§ ¿¹¹®¿¡ ´ëÇÑ °á·ÐÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°ÀÌ ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Ù.
¿¹) For these reasons, I think school should not sell junk food anymore. (ÁÖÁ¦ °Á¶ ¹®Àå) It is the school¡¯s responsibility to take care of students, so they should keep students away from unhealthy food.
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¿¹) Global warming is getting worse. (¿øÀÎ)
It caused ozone layer depletion. (°á°ú)
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Àд »ç¶÷ÀÌ Ã³À½À¸·Î Á¢ÇÏ°Ô µÇ´Â ºÎºÐÀ̱⠶§¹®¿¡ ¹«¾ùº¸´Ùµµ Áß¿äÇÏ´Ù. ¼·Ð ¹®´ÜÀº Àд ÀÌÀÇ °ü½É°ú Èï¹Ì¸¦ À̲ø¾î³¾ ¼ö Àִ¡®½ÃÀÛ ¹®Àå(opening sentence)¡¯°ú ÁÖ¾îÁø ÁÖÁ¦¿¡ ´ëÇÑ ±Û¾´ÀÌÀÇ¡®ÁÖÁ¦ ¹®Àå(thesis statement)¡¯À¸·Î ±¸¼ºµÈ´Ù. ¿¹¸¦ µé¾î¡®junk food¡¯¸¦ ÁÖÁ¦·Î ±ÛÀ» ¾´´Ù¸é ´ÙÀ½°ú °°ÀÌ ½ÃÀÛÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Ù.
¿¹) Most students like eating junk food a lot. (½ÃÀÛ¹®Àå) However, my teacher told me that junk food is not good for health. Thus, I think schools should not sell junk food anymore. (ÁÖÁ¦¹®Àå)
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º»·Ð¾²±â´Â ¼·Ð¿¡¼ Á¦½ÃµÈ ±Û¾´ÀÌÀÇ ÁÖÀå¿¡ ´ëÇÑ ±¸Ã¼ÀûÀÎ ÀÌÀ¯³ª ±Ù°Å¸¦ µé¾î¼ ¼³¸íÇÏ´Â °úÁ¤ÀÌ´Ù. ÀÌ·¸°Ô ÁÖÀåÀ» µÞ¹ÞħÇÏ´Â ¹®ÀåÀ»¡®³í°Å¹®Àå(supporting sentence)¡¯À̶ó°í ÇÑ´Ù. ¾Õ¼ ¿¹¸¦ µé¾ú´ø¡®junk food¡¯ÆÇ¸Å¸¦ ¹Ý´ëÇÏ´Â ÁÖÀå¿¡ ´ëÇÑ ³í°Å ¹®ÀåÀ¸·Î´Â ´ÙÀ½°ú °°Àº ³»¿ëÀÌ ¿Ã ¼ö ÀÖ´Ù.
¿¹) Junk food contains ingredients that are not good for health and can make students feel sluggish and heavy. (³í°Å¹®Àå1) Since junk food tastes good, students will not want to eat healthy food anymore. (³í°Å¹®Àå2)
°á·Ð (Conclusion)
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¿¹) For these reasons, I think school should not sell junk food anymore. (ÁÖÁ¦ °Á¶ ¹®Àå) It is the school¡¯s responsibility to take care of students, so they should keep students away from unhealthy food.
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¿¹) Global warming is getting worse. (¿øÀÎ)
It caused ozone layer depletion. (°á°ú)
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